Verse First ~ Close to The Source
Welcome to Verse First, where simple notions prompt amazing poems.
Today's notion?
CLOSE TO THE SOURCE
Good writing takes the reader on location. Good writing doesn't "talk about," but emanates the warmth, light and life of the topic at hand.
Consider these two lines:
"Her bloodstone stilettos click-clicked across the cold marble floor."
"She wore red shoes."
Get the idea? A good poem feels vivid and visceral and close to the source.
Today, become the experience. Write from the source. With detailed yet precise language, make us feel your meaning. Use necessary language and not a word more. In order to improve your skills, consider inviting fellow participants to suggest cuts and edits to create intense, condensed meaning. If this interests you, leave a note below your piece.
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I look forward to experiencing your work. ~ Kim
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Kim,
ReplyDeleteThis is key to excellent writing, and the part that I feel, I aspire to, but fail at, miserably.
Your prompt today will inspire me.
If you want concise may a suggest a form that requires getting the most mileage for your word choices. Google Ginsberg's American Sentence. You'll find at least 3 examples of mine own on my blog. Looking forward to the exerise.
ReplyDeleteAh, Kim, I will write this from my "vacation." Hope all is going well. (You haven't visited me in months, maybe years!)
ReplyDeleteThis is interesting! calls to invite an element of prose, perhaps. Running a schedule now not sure of making it. but will try.
ReplyDeleteDear Kim,
ReplyDeleteI tried to update my latest poem based on your post here. Would appreciate your feedback how to improve my 'Time Marker'. I need to be more adventurous in my writing.
Hi Kim~ I just happened to write my submission this morning from a dream I had. Felt like it fit the prompt though.
ReplyDeletelovely indeed
ReplyDeleteOkay, I think I got it backwards, oh well
ReplyDeleteThanks Kim maybe that Banana spider in my yard will inspire me!
ReplyDeleteThey say she is an orb one like Charlotte. I guess they call her the writing spider ;D
Well.... I must admit I'm not sure I understood the prompt, but hey here I am to enjoy your good poetry
ReplyDeleteThank you
D.
Kim,
ReplyDeleteI am slowly adjusting to being back home and into a routine, after my holiday to Portugal & Spain. So many inspiring memories:)
Back to writing with a rather creepy response to your interesting prompt....
Eileen
Kim,
DeleteI have actually made some minor changes to this poem , since first posting it....
Eileen
Have to run, but will be back later to read and comment. Thanks Kim, your prompt helped to focus an idea that had been drifting around for a few days. Welcomed inspiration,
ReplyDeleteElizabeth
I did my own interpretation of the prompt....listening to my muse. I am on my way now to read others' work, to see what YOU have done.
ReplyDeleteMary,
DeleteI have tried to link to your post here, but at this time, it states that the page does not exist...I have left a comment at a previous poem and can see via the Blog Roll menu, that I can link to your poem that way!!!
Off to read...
Eileen
Thanks, Eileen.....I now have the correct link!
DeleteHi Poets! I thought I'd give this one a go :D
ReplyDeleteI am at a conference, in my dorm room--much more luxurious than I am used to at Quaker gatherings!
ReplyDeleteHafta admit, I didn't write mine specially for this prompt, but I think it fits.
ReplyDeleteI don't know whether my poem is opt for the prompt or not
ReplyDeletebut what I felt...I wrote
Hope you all like
Kim - I had the idea this morning and you inspire me to put pen to paper. A useful exercise that we all need
ReplyDeletethanks
I bark at bees. Hope their hive is not near.
ReplyDeleteOne poem from the group-owned Carbon Noise Poetry. Come have a peek and a pastry.
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